Book 1: The Dead
Chapter 1
This is a story about how being lazy saved my life, and then
cost someone else theirs. My name is Will Sandren, and I am one of the last
surviving people I know of. I’m 21 and I’m a university student studying
education, my friends and I are big fans of sci-fi like Stargate and Falling
Skies. One of best friends Todd he loves zombie films and as a science geek we
are constantly discussing whether it’s possible, what we would do and how it
would happen. Turns out it was through a flu vaccination, or at least that’s
what we think, we’ve had a lot of time to think about it
.
I hate being sick, but wanting to work with children means
I’m going to have a lot of exposure to illnesses, that’s why I usually keep up
to date with my vaccinations. My sister, Sarah, does the same, she teaches
swimming. But when I got an email saying the latest flu vaccination was
available I was on my mid-year holidays. I work part-time at a child care
centre but they were on holidays too so I didn’t have much to do with my time.
When I got this email I didn’t worry much about, it wasn’t mandatory for
anything and I had until the end of the holidays until I have to return to the
petri dish that is my workplace.
And that’s how I made the decision that saved my life. The
next day my sister got really sick, she was coughing a lot and looked really
pale, she stayed in bed the whole day. I didn’t take much notice; I was just
excited that I got sole control of the television for a few hours. I was
chatting with my best friend Nicole, arranging to meet up the next day when my
sister came downstairs. She had coughed up blood and my dad had to take her to
the hospital. When I woke up the next day it was midday, my brother was at work
and my parents were with my sister at the hospital, I was starting to get
worried now, no one had ever be this sick in our household before.
I got dressed as usual and started to walk downstairs,
thinking about what I would watch today when I heard a scream from outside. We
lived in a small south-east suburb of Melbourne and although one side of our
house faced a busy road the direction the scream came from rarely had people on
it. I looked through the window, it was glazed so I could see much. The woman
who had screamed was now running past our house until she tripped, she wasn’t
exactly wearing clothes for running, and fell. Another figure appeared, walking
strangely as if he had hurt his leg, but that did nothing to hinder his speed.
He quickly caught up to her and almost leapt on her. Thoughts raced through my
head: What was happening? Who are these people? If he was attacking or raping
her, why in broad daylight? But I didn’t have time to figure out the answers
because he then did the most horrifying thing I could imagine, he bit her.
I ducked down from the window in fear that he would see me,
it was all I could do to stop myself from freaking out. I quickly called the
police but the phone simply answered: ‘All lines are currently busy.’ I almost
screamed at the phone, ‘how can all lines be busy?’ I panic and ran downstairs
and grabbed a large knife, I don’t know why but I felt like any moment the ma
would enter my house and try and kill me too. I must have sat there for at
least an hour until I had the courage to call 000 again. I got the same
unhelpful message and almost threw my phone across the room until I remembered
Mum and Dad. I called Dad, for some reason I thought he might know what was
going on. I had no idea of the repercussions of my actions.
He was in a store room, he hadn’t turned on the light so it
was still very dark and he was curled up in the corner of the room, barely
breathing he was so afraid to make a sound. He swore he did when his phone in
his pocket went off, he cursed himself that he did not turn it off when he entered
the hospital. He thought to turn it off but when he saw the caller ID he had to
answer out of hope. ‘Hello?’ he whispered
‘Dad?’ I sobbed over the phone, I hadn’t even noticed I was
crying, ‘is that you?’
‘Will! You’re alive!’ he was so relieved he forgot his
situation for a moment and allowed himself to speak louder, ‘are you alright’
‘A women outside our house was attacked, I saw it happen,’
images of those events kept repeating themselves in my mind
‘Stay inside Will! Okay? Just stay inside!’ the hope and joy
inside of Will’s father had been replaced with fear. ‘What happened Dad, are
you okay?’ Will had never heard his father like this before
‘Will, Sarah died an hour ago,’ his father moaned
‘What?’ Will was crying again, ‘how? What happened?’
‘I don’t know but a few seconds later she woke up,’ Will’s
father was speaking faster and louder as fear took control, ‘but she wasn’t the
same, Christine hugged her but then Sarah just bit into her neck.’ All Will
could do was listen as his father went on, ‘I called for help but all I heard
was screaming, I ran outside and everyone was running past me, I tried to grab
one for help but another patient came up behind me and bit my arm’
‘Dad are you alright? Where are you?’ Will’s horror now came
second to his concern
‘I ran, oh god I left your mother there and I ran with the
others, but the people in front just closed the doors.’ Will’s father was
talking loudly now and crying, ‘We tried to open it but they locked it! I hid
in her because people were’- his voice was cut off by a scream as the door to
the store room has knocked down by two patients, both with blood all over them.
Will’s father clung to his phone, his one connection to the world now gone,
‘Will there coming, don’t leave the house Will! All the people that were sick
they’- but he never got to finish the sentence as the patients began to bite
into him.
I really like the concept of the start of your story. I feel as though some bits suddenly jumped and there are a few spelling errors and the grammar sounds off. I would also like to read more of a description of the 'scary figures' that are obviously zombies. I like your suspense and words that invite the reader to think about what is happening. Keep working at it :)
ReplyDeleteThere's a new, updated version out recently. I just want to remind any readers, this stuff is mostly first drafts, i intend to do many, many proof reads and changes
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